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- Created on Friday, 01 November 2013 20:40
The heavy lifting for the rewrite of Spirit Fire is done. One of the problems: I had too many characters with Point of View (POV) scenes. Eleven scenes had to be rewritten or deleted to get from ten POV characters to four. The evaluator doesn’t give me a clue of how or even specifics of why I should do this. I have to figure it all out, so in the end, the solutions are all my own creation. Here is an example. I had a very dramatic scene involving Conchelik and her infant son. In the middle of the night, she is warned that her husband’s half-brother is in the village murdering everyone in the family. She and her son are high on the list to be killed because her son is in line to be chief. She makes a harrowing escape into the black of night with the help of another woman. The gory murders are described by the woman. We see Conchelik’s fear, determination, and desire for revenge. This experience and Conchelik’s response will be very important later in the story. What is wrong with this?
- Created on Monday, 14 October 2013 20:38
I got the review for Spirit Fire back. There are major changes suggested. The reviewer thinks there are too many Point of View (POV) characters and too many short scenes. The book is too long at 119,000 words, so I should just drop the short scenes. I should edit out scenes with POV characters who have less than three POV scenes.
- Created on Monday, 23 September 2013 20:36
I have finished the white draft of the changes to Spirit Fire, meaning it is ready to be sent to the professional evaluator. I fixed the grammatical, spelling, and punctuation errors, removed from narration and dialog any words or phrases that seem modern or out of context for a story that happened 5000 years ago, cleared up confusion about the alias Tincolad’s mother used, expanded some of the characters to round them out (especially Soft Cloud and Tincolad), expanded the romance between Soft Cloud and Tincolad, replaced some of the narration with action scenes to convey information in a way that moved the plot more seamlessly.
- Created on Friday, 30 August 2013 20:35
My blog Dashboard has been unavailable for over three weeks because of glitches on their end. I have been in the process of rewriting Spirit Fire. I have completed all the changes. That has consumed most of my computer time for the past couple of months. I have to read it though one more time to make sure all the changes flow seamlessly through the book. When that is done, I will send it to be professionally evaluated for the genre. My experience with evaluators is that they give very good ideas and suggestions, so when that comes back, I will be in for another round of editing to prepare it for the publisher.
- Created on Thursday, 18 July 2013 20:33
I had to drag out my thick skin and put it on after the www.RebeccasReads.com review of my book, “Spirit Fire.” It was a bad review, but it was accurate, so I my only solution is to rewrite it. I have finished the redlining. This book was meant to be a bridge between “Heart of the Bison” and “Search for the Heart of the Bison.” My goal was to answer some questions about the history of Neandertals leading up to “Search for the Heart of the Bison.” Now, having reread “Spirit Fire” for the first time since 2005, I have discovered that it is a damn good book by itself.
- Created on Tuesday, 04 June 2013 20:29
In September 1991, a 5,000-year-old mummy was found in the ?tztal Alps. His body was preserved naturally in the ice fields near the border between Italy and Austria. Preserved with him were his clothes, along with the implements and tools that he used in his daily life. X-rays revealed that he most probably died from an arrow wound that entered his back near his left shoulder. It appeared that the point had severed an artery and the “Iceman,” as he was called, died of blood loss. He had also sustained several other wounds, and the point of his flint dagger was broken off. Because he was preserved in ice, he was first called the Iceman. He is better known now as Ötzi.
- Created on Friday, 08 March 2013 19:17
Zendolot created light, plants, and animals. He gathered the evil of the earth and tied it into a sacred goat skin. Zendolot made Posidolot master of the oceans. Zendolot’s brother, Dracolot, did not like light, so Zendolot created darkness and made Dracolot master of the night.
Zendolot decided to take Aphrolak as his mate. Dracolot sneaked into her room and raped her in her sleep. Zendolot banished Dracolot to the dark caverns of the Earth.
- Created on Sunday, 24 February 2013 11:12
Five Thousand Years ago, a traveler brings information about strange people living in caves to Warlog, the man who invented war in Europe. Warlog is determined to exterminate the strange people whose description matches the dreaded Droglits that come from deep in the Earth to destroy the People. Meanwhile, Sotif, History Man of the Alliance between Sun People, (descendants of Cro-Magnons) and Earth People,(descendants of Neandertals), fights against changes that threaten to destroy the Alliance, which has already been in decline for several centuries. When Warlog attacks the Alliance, he destroys the Spirit Fire in a cave called the “Heart of the Bison” while Sotif watches in dismay. The Spirit Fire is a symbol of the relationship between the Alliance and Mother Earth. It has burned continuously since it was started nearly 20,000 years ago at the beginning of the Alliance. As war rages, Sotif discovers a young man, Rodlu, who has visions of another Spirit Fire. Sotif and Rodlu race to a land far away hoping to find the Spirit Fire and return in time save the Alliance from Warlog and his army. They solicit the help of Tincolad, a warrior from Warlog’s army who has changed sides for the love of Soft Cloud, a beautiful maiden of the Alliance.
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